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minus-squareAwkwardLookMonkeyPuppet@lemmy.worldlinkfedilinkarrow-up8arrow-down3·10 个月前A few too many commas in that line. Eh?
minus-squareCoggyMcFee@lemmy.worldlinkfedilinkarrow-up4·edit-210 个月前I mean you could put dashes on either side of “all of them” potentially instead of commas, but commas also work, especially in more poetic prose. Where would you straight-up remove a comma from the line?
minus-squarelewdian69@lemmy.worldlinkfedilinkarrow-up1·10 个月前Could use one more between “Sauron” and “and”
minus-squareIllecors@lemmy.cafelinkfedilinkEnglisharrow-up2arrow-down1·10 个月前No, that’s normal. Might look strange for a native english speaker, but it definitely normal in othet languages.
A few too many commas in that line. Eh?
I mean you could put dashes on either side of “all of them” potentially instead of commas, but commas also work, especially in more poetic prose. Where would you straight-up remove a comma from the line?
Could use one more between “Sauron” and “and”
No, that’s normal. Might look strange for a native english speaker, but it definitely normal in othet languages.